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Good luck to the remaining three! :)
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Thanks Misty
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THE ULTIMATE CHALLENGE OF DOOM

FINAL ROUND RESULTS


In third place, with a total of 80 points:

 
Ninjasplaycardgames2

Your strength was in grammar, but you lost points in pacing and because you did not split your story into paragraphs.


In second place, with a total of 86 points:

 
Mid-Knight

Your strength was in keeping the story interesting throughout, as well as the characterization of the YGO characters. You lost points due to several punctuation errors and run-on sentences.


And in first place, with a total of 88 points:

 
gcar90

Your strength, like Mid-Knight, was in keeping the story going and interesting throughout. You lost points because of random commas in the middle of sentences, and constantly changing between past and present tense.


Congratulations to all 3 of you. I get paid on Wednesday, so you will have your prize money this week.

Everyone, please send me your custom title request. Those of you who already have permanent custom titles, please request an alternate prize idea and we will go from there.
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Well it wasn't so bad for a guy whose first language is spanish. I thought I was going to be in the third place. YAY!
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Great iob winners! I am very proud of you. XD
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Thanks mom :v
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Well it wasn't so bad for a guy whose first language is spanish. I thought I was going to be in the third place. YAY!
So is mine, where do you live? :I
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Thanks mom :v
You're welcome sweety. *pinches cheek* :V
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Great job, you guys!! :D
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By a hair.
Tenses and punctuation was never my strong point. I probably should have had my live in proofreader go through it before submitting.
Either way.

Good job everyone.
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Well it wasn't so bad for a guy whose first language is spanish. I thought I was going to be in the third place. YAY!
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So is mine, where do you live? :I
Both of you did really well for Spanish being your first language.

Ninjas actually had the least grammatical errors out of all 3 stories.

For both of you, your main mistakes didn't have as much to do with the English grammar being incorrect.
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So is mine, where do you live? :I
Mexico, you?
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You know, I can't help but think the choice of name for the main character had something to do with the two points that pushed me over the edge.
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You know, I can't help but think the choice of name for the main character had something to do with the two points that pushed me over the edge.
It wasn't.

You and Mid-Knight were originally tied, actually. But I had to knock off two more points because the run-on sentences were more significant than the errors that I counted throughout your piece.
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I wish I could have competed in the last round. It looked way more interesting than searching through BARs. Unfortunately, I have no tolerance for incessant tedium so there was no way I was making it past that round.
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It wasn't.

You and Mid-Knight were originally tied, actually. But I had to knock off two more points because the run-on sentences were more significant than the errors that I counted throughout your piece.
Either way, it was fun.
Thanks Sally chan.
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What is a run-on sentence?
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"A run-on is a sentence in which two or more independent clauses (i.e., complete sentences) are joined without appropriate punctuation or conjunction."
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Run-on_sentence
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If anyone is familiar with poetry or music.
Think of Writing a story to be similar to that.
Each sentence is another line in the flow of the poem or song.
You'll have long sentences, short sentences.
The punctuation used can affect the flow of the piece. Putting periods and commas let the audience know where to pause or stop in a particular line.

Mid-Knight, don't feel too bad about the run-on sentences. I had the same issues with my own story. I got happy with commas, you forgot a few periods in your piece. It was an extremely close contest. It was as close to a tie as could be. Better luck next time.
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Mid-Knight, don't feel too bad about the run-on sentences. I had the same issues with my own story. I got happy with commas, you forgot a few periods in your piece. It was an extremely close contest. It was as close to a tie as could be. Better luck next time.
I'm usually not confident with my english XD, thanks a lot gcar90, congratulations!
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I'm usually not confident with my english XD, thanks a lot gcar90, congratulations!
And again, I will say that your English was very good for it not being your first language.
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I'm usually not confident with my english XD, thanks a lot gcar90, congratulations!
Thanks. and congratz to you too.

As for my title for six months.
I already have a title, and see no need to change it.
Sally-chan, since the judging of the final round was so close, can Mid-knight have six months of title, that was attached to my prize since I don't want to use it?
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I'm a little late: but congratulations you guys!
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Thanks. and congratz to you too.

As for my title for six months.
I already have a title, and see no need to change it.
Sally-chan, since the judging of the final round was so close, can Mid-knight have six months of title, that was attached to my prize since I don't want to use it?
He can have it, but you still get to choose an alternate prize to go with your $15 gift card.
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Mexico, you?
Puerto Rico
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I dont remember how long my title lasts and I cant check now but I'd like my title to beeee..... Kinzo
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Sally~ how do I get my 5 amazon bucks? :v
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He can have it, but you still get to choose an alternate prize to go with your $15 gift card.
15? I thought it was 20, eh, not important. I was going to blow my prize on Harry, anyway. Maybe I can find some sort of Amazon grabbag of Beatles stuff that would totally take care of a couple days worth of Hanukkah presents for my honey, this year.
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I'm just happy I got 5 :v
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BUY A 5 DOLLAR FOOTLONG
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